I come from a small, economically depressed town in Northern Wisconson. Others write about a subject that they don't care about, but that they think will impress admissions officers.
Participating in such a large study from start to finish has validated my interest in academic research as a profession.
And how he was treating them back. To me, personal stuff is the information you usually keep to yourself, or your closest friends and family. Before you know it, you will have told the story you outlined—and reached the necessary word count—and you will be happy you spent all that time preparing!
Keep the story focused on a discrete moment in time. The layouts of the pages are already imprinted in my mind, so I simply draw them on scratch paper.
Avoid switching back and forth from different tenses.
By zeroing in on one particular aspect of what is, invariably, a long story, you may be better able to extract meaning from the story. Which idea can you develop further and not lose the reader?
Be aware of task status, guide your writer, stay in touch with him, if necessary. Parents can advise, encourage, and offer a second set of eyes, but they should never add their own words to a student's essay.